I read your proposed argument on a controversial educational issue. Your first draft I feel is a positive beginning to your argument for students to obtain more freedom in the classroom. The way you've incorporated the three authors you used in a good tactic, but I would include the page numbers with the author's last name when pulling a quote from a text source. The statements you've provided in your argument to compare and contrast the different ideologies felt by the authors adds depth to your statements and helps to clarify why a classrooms need to inhereit a true liberal teaching and learning atmosphere. When presenting a statement in an argument it's useful to stay away from jargin and cliché writing. I like your approach to incorporate
