I really enjoyed your comprehensive revision. The way you rearranged some of the sentences really helped the cohesiveness of the review and made it funnier, but I found it a little strange that you decided to put TOM RIDDLE and RADIANT FARMS in all caps but had changed that in your grammatical revision. I really liked how you moved the paragraph about the farming/mixing of unicorn meat with the paragraph about meat from other mythical creatures, as I stated above it really
I really enjoyed your comprehensive revision. The way you rearranged some of the sentences really helped the cohesiveness of the review and made it funnier, but I found it a little strange that you decided to put TOM RIDDLE and RADIANT FARMS in all caps but had changed that in your grammatical revision. I really liked how you moved the paragraph about the farming/mixing of unicorn meat with the paragraph about meat from other mythical creatures, as I stated above it really