Naveen,
Thanks for submitting your paper on time, I sure do appreciate that. To the paper, you got off to a great start and provided a wonderful introduction, but you failed to connect your argument for the clinical, academic, research, and policy roles of doctors to your personal beliefs and values. Also, several times in the paper as you talked about these roles, I felt that you missed the opportunity to talk about your personal feelings about the issues of patient surveys, medical education, research and policy. In addition, I would have been stoked to see more information in the paper about the physician taking on more advocacy and leadership functions, as I agree with you that this is very much needed. Honestly, it seems like you almost depersonalized the paper, when I really wanted you to …show more content…
Just some general comments for your consideration. Please use them to improve your papers going forward.
• The assignment required that you utilize the APA format, but you did not. So, please refer to the information under the resource Tab on the course portal for more information on APA formatting
• For APA, your references must be on a separate page than the body of the paper. You also missed several opportunities to cite relevant and current sources that substantiated your comments.
• For APA, you are required to have a cover page with a running head, your title and name, as well as the name of the school, etc.
• The paper was also a little disjointed, and even at the summary paragraph, I hoped that you would have connected all the physician roles you so eloquently mentioned, cite the literature, and talk more about what you feel about this issue.
Also, I wanted to offer you the opportunity to use these comments to revise and resubmit this paper, I would be willing to review another copy and use your new grade for the assignment. If you would like to do this, please let me know, and I will hold off from submitting your
Thanks for submitting your paper on time, I sure do appreciate that. To the paper, you got off to a great start and provided a wonderful introduction, but you failed to connect your argument for the clinical, academic, research, and policy roles of doctors to your personal beliefs and values. Also, several times in the paper as you talked about these roles, I felt that you missed the opportunity to talk about your personal feelings about the issues of patient surveys, medical education, research and policy. In addition, I would have been stoked to see more information in the paper about the physician taking on more advocacy and leadership functions, as I agree with you that this is very much needed. Honestly, it seems like you almost depersonalized the paper, when I really wanted you to …show more content…
Just some general comments for your consideration. Please use them to improve your papers going forward.
• The assignment required that you utilize the APA format, but you did not. So, please refer to the information under the resource Tab on the course portal for more information on APA formatting
• For APA, your references must be on a separate page than the body of the paper. You also missed several opportunities to cite relevant and current sources that substantiated your comments.
• For APA, you are required to have a cover page with a running head, your title and name, as well as the name of the school, etc.
• The paper was also a little disjointed, and even at the summary paragraph, I hoped that you would have connected all the physician roles you so eloquently mentioned, cite the literature, and talk more about what you feel about this issue.
Also, I wanted to offer you the opportunity to use these comments to revise and resubmit this paper, I would be willing to review another copy and use your new grade for the assignment. If you would like to do this, please let me know, and I will hold off from submitting your