QUOTATION WORKSHEET:
ORIGINAL: I have a gun and I am not afraid to use it if necessary! said the bank robber.
REVISED: The bank robber, yelled, “I have a gun, and I am not afraid to use it if necessary.”
ORIGINAL: Just a minute said Unit 17 I’m just around the corner
REVISED: Unit 17, responds with, “Just a minute, I’m just around the corner.”
ORIGINAL: The loss prevention agent told us we couldn’t leave until the police arrived.
REVISED: The loss prevention agent told us we couldn’t leave until the police arrived.
ORIGINAL: I punched him because he called me a moron Jeff blurted out.
REVISED: Jeff impulsively states, “I punched him because he called me a moron.”
ORIGINAL: The witness told the police that he saw the man that assaulted the old …show more content…
REVISED: Officer Ross yelled, “Freeze!”
ORIGINAL: Sgt. Hauser asked me what I was doing on my days off.
REVISED: Sgt. Hauser, asked me: “What are you doing on your days off?”
ORIGINAL: WOW
REVISED: Wow!
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PUNCTUATION WORKSHEET:
ORIGINAL: Sgt. Caine the shift supervisor was taken to the hospital by ambulance after being injured in the accident
REVISED: Sgt. Caine, shift supervisor, sustains an accidental injury, then taken by ambulance to the hospital.
*(I get that the worksheet just mentions Punctuation, but some can use shortening for report purpose. The revised sentence above: Minus 4 words and chronological. Without missing a beat?)
ORIGINAL: Matthew Mark Luke and John are all named in the Bible
REVISED: Named in the Bible are: Mathew, Mark, Luke, and John.
*(10 words vs, orig. 12 words)
ORIGINAL: Judge Fields the Municipal Court Judge required bond to be posted for domestic violence and criminal damage violations
REVISED: In the Municipal Court, Judge Fields, requires a post bond for domestic violence, and criminal damage violations.
*(17 words vs, orig. 19
ORIGINAL: I have a gun and I am not afraid to use it if necessary! said the bank robber.
REVISED: The bank robber, yelled, “I have a gun, and I am not afraid to use it if necessary.”
ORIGINAL: Just a minute said Unit 17 I’m just around the corner
REVISED: Unit 17, responds with, “Just a minute, I’m just around the corner.”
ORIGINAL: The loss prevention agent told us we couldn’t leave until the police arrived.
REVISED: The loss prevention agent told us we couldn’t leave until the police arrived.
ORIGINAL: I punched him because he called me a moron Jeff blurted out.
REVISED: Jeff impulsively states, “I punched him because he called me a moron.”
ORIGINAL: The witness told the police that he saw the man that assaulted the old …show more content…
REVISED: Officer Ross yelled, “Freeze!”
ORIGINAL: Sgt. Hauser asked me what I was doing on my days off.
REVISED: Sgt. Hauser, asked me: “What are you doing on your days off?”
ORIGINAL: WOW
REVISED: Wow!
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PUNCTUATION WORKSHEET:
ORIGINAL: Sgt. Caine the shift supervisor was taken to the hospital by ambulance after being injured in the accident
REVISED: Sgt. Caine, shift supervisor, sustains an accidental injury, then taken by ambulance to the hospital.
*(I get that the worksheet just mentions Punctuation, but some can use shortening for report purpose. The revised sentence above: Minus 4 words and chronological. Without missing a beat?)
ORIGINAL: Matthew Mark Luke and John are all named in the Bible
REVISED: Named in the Bible are: Mathew, Mark, Luke, and John.
*(10 words vs, orig. 12 words)
ORIGINAL: Judge Fields the Municipal Court Judge required bond to be posted for domestic violence and criminal damage violations
REVISED: In the Municipal Court, Judge Fields, requires a post bond for domestic violence, and criminal damage violations.
*(17 words vs, orig. 19