I provide better evidence and my sentences will flow together smoother than before. My first essay of the year reads, “My sister and I have different experiences since we pursue different hobbies. I enjoy creating crafts and cooking. My sister loaves anything to do with the kitchen. She enjoys watching anime and learning about robotics. I am completely uninterested with robotics. Due to dissimilarities like these we have had different experiences.” However, my rhetorical analysis written much later during the semester reads, “One fact he supplies in the beginning of his essay is a quote from James Truslow Adams that states that this man was the first to coin the phrase “American Dream” during the Great Depression (Page 610 – 611, Para.1). The quote successfully supports his argument as it reveals that the American Dream was created during economic hardship. Therefore it will not be damaged by the economic hardships during the essay.” In the latter excerpt the sentences transition into each other much smoother and the evidence is more concrete. My improvement in the MEAL plan was much greater since I was not taught the MEAL plan before this class. While my paragraphs somewhat resembled the MEAL plan, they did not follow the MEAL plan exactly. One of the paragraphs in my first essay
I provide better evidence and my sentences will flow together smoother than before. My first essay of the year reads, “My sister and I have different experiences since we pursue different hobbies. I enjoy creating crafts and cooking. My sister loaves anything to do with the kitchen. She enjoys watching anime and learning about robotics. I am completely uninterested with robotics. Due to dissimilarities like these we have had different experiences.” However, my rhetorical analysis written much later during the semester reads, “One fact he supplies in the beginning of his essay is a quote from James Truslow Adams that states that this man was the first to coin the phrase “American Dream” during the Great Depression (Page 610 – 611, Para.1). The quote successfully supports his argument as it reveals that the American Dream was created during economic hardship. Therefore it will not be damaged by the economic hardships during the essay.” In the latter excerpt the sentences transition into each other much smoother and the evidence is more concrete. My improvement in the MEAL plan was much greater since I was not taught the MEAL plan before this class. While my paragraphs somewhat resembled the MEAL plan, they did not follow the MEAL plan exactly. One of the paragraphs in my first essay